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when i was born my own personal carnage began
shocked into a reality i would never liken to
while others suck their putrid cigar air
swim poluted rivers, spawning in a gambling miasma
magnificent horses, their great bulk standing on fingernails
would run mile after single mile

at the end of their short lives
convelesce at the gates of a glue factory
or to be shot
or the lucky ones who were loved for more than a fat purse
would eat sweet grass in some peaceful field

i wish i was born one thousand years ago
to ride through the castle gate
dressed in velvet
scarlet as a setting sun
guarding my chastity
for the chosen one
another grouping of my wacky sring of words
[link] Music by *divee
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ra76 Featured By Owner May 2, 2010
another awesome poem
I love the 1st section, you are aware of the ugliness of the surroundings of the race track and these beautiful creatures are there for are fat greedy selves and roman enjoyment.
Then the 2nd section- the end of the line for the horse- none of which are good-even the grazer lost it's spirit and just eats the rest of its days.
Then your empathetic last section, where you imagine yourself as the horse, as he or she should be. Loved, respected and made for legend.
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Deborah-Valentine Featured By Owner May 2, 2010  Professional Traditional Artist
wow, nobody reads my poems

thank you!

[link]
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ra76 Featured By Owner May 2, 2010
My pleasure
and thanks for your link
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yakiroba Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2006
sweet!! I love your writing, and it's really cool to hear it put to music!! :D
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Deborah-Valentine Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2006  Professional Traditional Artist
So you have heard from Ton's site!
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yakiroba Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2007
yes!! I finally checked it out!! I can be a slacker at time! :nerd:
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Deborah-Valentine Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2007  Professional Traditional Artist
why did you delete all the corpses we made together?
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yakiroba Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2007
oh I didn't! what had happened was that I put them in storage so they wouldn't get chosen for the show a couple of months back. the problem now is that I'm not able to get into my storage!! I'm hoping it's just some bug that dA is working on, cuz all of my collaborations are invisible :(
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Deborah-Valentine Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2007  Professional Traditional Artist
weird! well I am glad you put some light on that matter. i was sooo sad :tears:
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yakiroba Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2007
yeah I'm pretty annoyed about the whole thing because I was afraid this would happen, that someone would think I deleted my collabs with them
I think Victor Newman is waiting for you in Conference Room C :fear:
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